As much as I enjoyed this fiction and that you've completed it I've spotted a major error. D:!

"Altair is chanting, "Malik, Malik, Malik" and it isn't long before the final snap arrives and he is coming thickly directly down Altair's throat."

Should that be Malik? And not Altair spilling his seed into his own throat? Anyway, I Felt like showing that to you.